Posts Tagged ‘essay advice’

Many Eyes, But Only One Voice

Monday, December 12th, 2011

Recently I was asked to answer a question as part of the Unigo Experts Network.  The question was, “Is it OK to have someone proofread your college admissions essay?”  Our response is limited to only 100 words, but I thought this was a good question and worthy of a longer article.  So, here I am going to expand upon my response.

The short answer is, yes, it is permissible to have others read and edit your college admission essay for you.  With that being said, the ideas must be your own, and the voice must remain unmistakably yours.  While admissions officers differ on whether or not they are able to determine if a student has actually written the essay, there is no question that a 30 or 40 year old writes with a much different voice than a 17 or 18 year old writes with.

That being said, a college admissions essay should represent a students best work.  The best writers are those who rewrite and carefully hone their message.  The essay cannot possibly be the best work of a student unless it has moved through a few drafts with steady improvement.  Often times, when we write something we become too connected to the writing to be able to objectively edit.  Unfortunately, I see this in my own writing, where I will edit a letter and send it out only to realize later that it still had a mistake.  However, when I pick up writing for one of my coworkers, I can easily identify the mistakes.  Having someone who has no emotional connection to the writing helps to eliminate some common mistakes such as having a word spelled correctly, but it not being the right word and sending the wrong essay to a college (think of an essay finishing with, “…and that is why I want to go to your biggest competitor.).

It is important that you have two different types of people edit your essay: those who know you well and those who don’t know you well.  Why is that important?  You want someone who knows you to read your essay and finish it and think that the essay accurately portrays you.  Further, you want someone who doesn’t know you to finish reading the essay and get the feeling that they do know you.  This means you need to start your essay early enough to allow time to have people review your essay for you.

AdmissionHook.com Advice for How to Write the Best College Admission Essay

Tuesday, September 20th, 2011

AdmissionHook.com Advice on How To Write The Best College Admission Essay

In this video James Maroney and Guy Milone discuss what makes a good college admission essay. Guy gives tips on telling the story and some examples of essays he has read in the past that truly resonated with him.

Spotlight Essay Advice with Paul Brower, Associate Director of Admission at Nichols College

Monday, July 19th, 2010

In this video, James Maroney of www.admissionhook.com interviews Paul Brower, Associate Director of Admission at Nichols College, about the personal statement.  Paul gives examples of his favorite essays as well as some advice on what not to do when writing the college essay.

Spotlight Essay Advice with Matt Beirne of the College of St. Benedict and St. John’s University

Friday, July 16th, 2010

In this video, James Maroney of AdmissionHook.com interviews Matt Beirne, Director of Admission at the College of St. Benedict and St. John’s University, about the college admission essay.  The cover tips on how to write the essay as well as some examples of Matt’s favorite essays over the past couple of years.

Writing the Scholarship Essay

Friday, May 7th, 2010
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The essay is the most difficult part of a scholarship application, and it’s often the only
thing that separates winners from the rest of the applicant pool. Even the best writers struggle
with the scholarship essay because it differs so greatly from academic essays. Scholarship
evaluators generally don’t read essays from a technical standpoint (unless, of course, the paper
is riddled with simple, lazy errors); rather, they read in order to get a better idea of the
applicant’s personal history, qualities, and aspirations. The essay is meant to give applicants a
chance to convey ideas that cannot be expressed in SAT scores or lists of accomplishments.
Everyone has unique characteristics, and with a few simple tips anyone can write a successful
scholarship essay that showcases these qualities.
The first step in beginning the writing process is, quite simply, to begin the writing
process. Gather information and construct a rough draft several weeks, maybe a month…
or two, before you intend to submit the application. To make choosing a topic easier, write
down a list of the personal qualities and goals that you want to emphasize to the scholarship’s
evaluators then choose something (probably a personal story) that clearly displays these
characteristics. Don’t just write empty, aimless prose and try to fill it in with useful information.
It’s usually best to make an outline before starting the rough draft, but this is not absolutely
necessary. Some find it easier to just begin writing, especially when recounting a true story.
However, if you choose the latter method, make sure that you have a specific story and well-
defined points of emphasis in mind; again, don’t write aimlessly. Work on the essay a little bit
each day. This gives you a chance to review the essay with a clear mind (if you write and revise
it all at once, your ideas tend to blend together). After you’ve written a rough draft, begin to
revise with an eye toward content. Don’t worry about grammar or prose quality until the final
weeks because these errors are easily correctable. Finally, make sure to use your resources
throughout the process; these could include English teachers, tutors, your family, and your
friends.
Essays can make the scholarship application process difficult. However, no scholarship
that’s worth having comes easily, and if you follow the advice above any scholarship essay is
doable.

The essay is the most difficult part of a scholarship application, and it’s often the only thing that separates winners from the rest of the applicant pool. Even the best writers struggle with the scholarship essay because it differs so greatly from academic essays. Scholarship evaluators generally don’t read essays from a technical standpoint (unless, of course, the paper

is riddled with simple, lazy errors); rather, they read in order to get a better idea of the applicant’s personal history, qualities, and aspirations. The essay is meant to give applicants a chance to convey ideas that cannot be expressed in SAT scores or lists of accomplishments.  Everyone has unique characteristics, and with a few simple tips anyone can write a successful  scholarship essay that showcases these qualities.

The first step in beginning the writing process is, quite simply, to begin the writing process. Gather information and construct a rough draft several weeks, maybe a month… or two, before you intend to submit the application. To make choosing a topic easier, write down a list of the personal qualities and goals that you want to emphasize to the scholarship’s evaluators then choose something (probably a personal story) that clearly displays these characteristics. Don’t just write empty, aimless prose and try to fill it in with useful information.  It’s usually best to make an outline before starting the rough draft, but this is not absolutely necessary. Some find it easier to just begin writing, especially when recounting a true story.  However, if you choose the latter method, make sure that you have a specific story and well-defined points of emphasis in mind; again, don’t write aimlessly. Work on the essay a little bit each day. This gives you a chance to review the essay with a clear mind (if you write and revise it all at once, your ideas tend to blend together). After you’ve written a rough draft, begin to revise with an eye toward content. Don’t worry about grammar or prose quality until the final weeks because these errors are easily correctable. Finally, make sure to use your resources throughout the process; these could include English teachers, tutors, your family, and your friends.

Essays can make the scholarship application process difficult. However, no scholarship that’s worth having comes easily, and if you follow the advice above any scholarship essay is doable.