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Many Eyes, But Only One Voice

Monday, December 12th, 2011

Recently I was asked to answer a question as part of the Unigo Experts Network.  The question was, “Is it OK to have someone proofread your college admissions essay?”  Our response is limited to only 100 words, but I thought this was a good question and worthy of a longer article.  So, here I am going to expand upon my response.

The short answer is, yes, it is permissible to have others read and edit your college admission essay for you.  With that being said, the ideas must be your own, and the voice must remain unmistakably yours.  While admissions officers differ on whether or not they are able to determine if a student has actually written the essay, there is no question that a 30 or 40 year old writes with a much different voice than a 17 or 18 year old writes with.

That being said, a college admissions essay should represent a students best work.  The best writers are those who rewrite and carefully hone their message.  The essay cannot possibly be the best work of a student unless it has moved through a few drafts with steady improvement.  Often times, when we write something we become too connected to the writing to be able to objectively edit.  Unfortunately, I see this in my own writing, where I will edit a letter and send it out only to realize later that it still had a mistake.  However, when I pick up writing for one of my coworkers, I can easily identify the mistakes.  Having someone who has no emotional connection to the writing helps to eliminate some common mistakes such as having a word spelled correctly, but it not being the right word and sending the wrong essay to a college (think of an essay finishing with, “…and that is why I want to go to your biggest competitor.).

It is important that you have two different types of people edit your essay: those who know you well and those who don’t know you well.  Why is that important?  You want someone who knows you to read your essay and finish it and think that the essay accurately portrays you.  Further, you want someone who doesn’t know you to finish reading the essay and get the feeling that they do know you.  This means you need to start your essay early enough to allow time to have people review your essay for you.

How to Write a Good Essay Using Essay Reviews

Friday, August 20th, 2010

How to Write a Good Essay Using Essay Reviews
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So (never use “so”), you think that you write pretty good (well). However, every essay could use a bit of improvement. One of the most biggest mistakes students make is to ignore the opinions of others when writing their essays. You can greatly improve your chances of admission into your first choice college by using essay reviews to improve your college admissions essay (don’t write in the second-person). Here are a few tips (too blunt):
The first step in using essay reviews is to GET THEM! Many students view essay revision as a mere formality. However, unless you’re a bestselling author who does his own copy-editing, you need all of the input that you can get! You should have your parents, teachers, and counselors review your essay, in addition to obtaining a professional opinion .
Once you’ve compiled essay reviews, you should read them and carefully consider each revision, especially suggestions about the structure and content of the piece (you need not pay much attention to grammatical corrections unless they come from your English teacher or professionals ; far too many potential reviewers consider a semi-colon and a comma to be interchangeable). Though you may not wish to incorporate every reviewer’s thoughts, they will spur your imagination as to what your essay could eventually become.
At this point you must take care to use your own voice when making revisions. One of the best ways to do this is by considering every suggested revision, then stashing-away the essay reviews and making corrections to your own work. This method helps to prevent you from accidentally copying the reviewers’ exact phrasing.
The last step in this process is to repeat, repeat, REPEAT! After you’ve revised your essay, obtain more reviews. In fact, our editing service offers price breaks for subsequent essay revisions.
Perhaps the best (and only) way to use essay reviews to write a good essay is to get them and use them. Far too many students make the mistake of self-editing. By obtaining and paying attention to essay reviews, you’ll help to put yourself ahead of the game.
(Awkwardly informal, written in the second person, poor vocabulary).

This article was contributed by Dakota Meyers, who just completed his freshman year at Yale University and is a regular contributor to the CollegeTreasure.comandAdmissionHook.com blogs. He is a 2009 graduate of Hoisington High School in Hoisington, KS. At Hoisington High, he won varsity letters in debate, speech, scholars’ bowl, and band. He won the 2009 3A Kansas State Championship in extemporaneous speech.

At Yale, Dakota intends to major in Economics and Mathematics. He writes for the campus publication Business Sphere and is an active member of the Yale chapter of Nourish International. He also participates in the Yale Political Union as a member of the Independent Party.

As a current college student, Dakota has recent first-hand experience with the college admission process.

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Spotlight Essay Advice with Paul Brower, Associate Director of Admission at Nichols College

Monday, July 19th, 2010

In this video, James Maroney of www.admissionhook.com interviews Paul Brower, Associate Director of Admission at Nichols College, about the personal statement.  Paul gives examples of his favorite essays as well as some advice on what not to do when writing the college essay.

College Essay Success

Friday, January 15th, 2010

Congratulations! The fact that you are looking up tips on college essays indicates your desire to write a successful essay. Research is always the best way to start when it comes to targeting your audience. Just think about people in sales jobs – what better way to make that sale than to know what your potential customer wants? It is no different for you as a college applicant. You need to sell your college admissions audience on your potential as a member of their academic community. One of the best ways to do this is to write an interesting and convincing essay.

Five Important Tips for Writing Your College Essay

  1. Give Them What They’re Asking For – Be sure to answer the essay question given. It’s pretty basic but stick to the topic, develop it, and support it. In addition, be sure to write your essay specifically for that school. Don’t recycle your essays.
  2. Be Original – Imagine reading essay after essay. It’s no different from employers scouring resume after resume. Think about what is really significant and powerful to you and about you. If you write from the heart it will immediately draw in your audience. Use your natural style; don’t be overly formal and stilted. The essay reader wants to know what kind of person you are. Take a stand and support your information. A fearful, “trying-to-hard-to-say-what-you-want-to-hear” essay isn’t going to fool anyone. Remember, they read these en masse every year.
  3. Make it Easy to Read – Your content doesn’t have to be simplistic, but all readers desire content to be easy to read. No one wants to struggle through your essay. If your structure is poorly planned and executed, your reader may not even make it through to the end. Organization is very important. Always have a thesis and don’t stray from your topic. Support your thesis with interesting and solid information. Again, stick to the topic and don’t run-on, ramble, or take on an idea too wide to cover. Transition smoothly between supporting points and use a pleasing, neat format. Appearances are the first thing that will invite or turn-off your reader.
  4. Focus on the Future – Often you’ll have to provide background, like what you’ve learned and where you’ve come from in your essay. It’s all part of who you are. Yet, students often make the mistake of focusing too much on the past. Show that you are a forward-thinker. Discuss your intentions if possible – what you strive to accomplish and why. Admissions really needs to have more confidence about where you are going than where you have been.
  5. Prove Your Value – The role of a college’s admissions staff is to select the best from its pool of applicants. You must give your readers a reason to feel you’ll be an asset to the college. Your accomplishments, challenges, and attitudes will all show what kind of potential you have as a student and member of the campus, not to mention what kind of alumnus you will be. The college’s reputation is affected by the students they turn out and the successes they have. The value you bring has a lot to do with the value of the college itself. Don’t leave information up to interpretation, answer your essay with specific information that proves something (or many things) that are positive about you.
    Successfully implementing these five steps in your college essay will make your essay one that stands out among the rest. Your original, future-focused, easy-to-read, specific, value-proving essay will need only one more thing – proofreading! After all this hard work, don’t let careless errors ruin your well-crafted essay!

October 14, 2009 Edition of Carnival of College Admission

Thursday, October 15th, 2009

Choosing the Right College

Now that summer has officially ended we are in the midst of many of the annual rites of fall: changing colors of the leaves; college football; and college applications.  For many, the debate rages over whether or not they should apply Early Decision.  Todd Johnson tells you what you need to think about before applying early decision to a college in his post Is Early Decision Right For You? at College Admissions Counseling.  Another hotly debated issue is that of college rankings. Admissions expert Brady Norvall shares his perspective on whether you should consider us college rankings when choosing a college in his post Ranking the US College Rankings posted at myUsearch blog.   Also, as students stare at their college applications they are often faced with the question of “What do you want to do after college?”  Nissim Ziv presents What Career is Right For Me? Finding the Right Career Path posted at Job Interview Guide.  Just as there are many new career paths, there are also many new majors available at universities.  Saying, “Some of the hottest new college majors need some decoding — learn what subjects like sustainability and health informatics are all about,” Dawn Papandrea does just that in Decoding Emerging College Majors posted at CollegeSurfing Insider.

College Life

While most students are focused on what they hope to do in the new semester, Brett J Callahan presents Five Back-to-School Do NOT’s posted at 2East: The College Living Blog.  Also, back on campus many students are feeling a financial pinch and might be tempted to look for credit cards.  For these students, Jim presents Best Student Credit Cards posted at Blueprint for Financial Prosperity.  In order to save money, many students are considering moving off campus.  Across the country, many new students are just tussling with their first college exams and term papers.  Don’t worry freshman,Carolyn Friedman gives you useful web tools that will help you earn the grades your parent’s will be proud of while you are secretly having the time of your life as a freshman at 75 + Useful Web Tools for Your First Year of College posted at Online Christian Colleges, Tom Tessin gives tips you can use if you’re looking to find an apartment around the college campus in Apartments for College Students ? Finding One posted at FCC Student Blog.  With the recession, many non-traditional students are heading back to school as well.  Read about going back to school at age 40 when softmelon presents Back to School posted at The Den of Psychosis.

Financial Aid

Need-based financial aid deadlines are just around the corner, but there is no time like the present to start researching scholarships.  Chris presents All About the Tylenol Scholarship posted at MJJ Party.  One of the keys to financing a college education is to start saving early.   Patrick @ Cash Money Life presents Open New Ohio 529 Account to Get $200 in Bonuses posted at Cash Money Life, saying, “The Ohio 529 College Savings Plan, CollegeAdvantage, is offering a generous sign up bonus for new accounts. You can easily earn a couple hundred dollars to go toward your college savings.”

Getting Admitted

To ED or not to ED, that is the question.  Mark Montgomery tackles this question in his post Early Decision or Regular Decision in College Admission–Which is Better? posted at Great College Advice, saying, “Students and parents are often confused about whether to use early decision as a strategy for admission. This post clears up that confusion.”  There is a lot of talk about the growing gender gap at America’s college campuses.  Andrew Syrios tackles this issue in Lies, Damned Lies and Statistics: The Female-Male College Gap | SwiftEconomics.com posted at SwiftEconomics.com.

Graduate SchoolsUnfortunately, not every application has a happy ending.  Adam Markus presents A Happy Story of HBS Rejection posted at Adam Markus: Graduate Admissions Guru, saying, “A MBA admissions consultant reflects on The Snowball by Alice Schroeder”

Other Cool StuffCandice Arnold presents AIESEC Internships Foster Understanding and Improve Students’ Marketability : CollegeRecruiter.com Insights by Internship Experts Blog posted at CollegeRecruiter.com.  Lynn Mattoon presents Gearing Up for the Careers of Tomorrow posted at My College Admissions Blog – MyCollegeCalendar.org, saying, “Today’s college students may be preparing for jobs that don’t exist yet!”

Diane Steward presents 25 Excellent “Dot Gov” Tools to Research Any Online School posted at Online University Data, saying, “From search tools to financial aid resources and more, these 25 Web resources from the government will help you in your quest to earn any degree.” Kathy Wilson presents 10 U.S. Presidents Who Got Their Start in Teaching posted at Online Schools.

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