Recently I was asked to answer a question as part of the Unigo Experts Network. The question was, “Is it OK to have someone proofread your college admissions essay?” Our response is limited to only 100 words, but I thought this was a good question and worthy of a longer article. So, here I am going to expand upon my response.
The short answer is, yes, it is permissible to have others read and edit your college admission essay for you. With that being said, the ideas must be your own, and the voice must remain unmistakably yours. While admissions officers differ on whether or not they are able to determine if a student has actually written the essay, there is no question that a 30 or 40 year old writes with a much different voice than a 17 or 18 year old writes with.
That being said, a college admissions essay should represent a students best work. The best writers are those who rewrite and carefully hone their message. The essay cannot possibly be the best work of a student unless it has moved through a few drafts with steady improvement. Often times, when we write something we become too connected to the writing to be able to objectively edit. Unfortunately, I see this in my own writing, where I will edit a letter and send it out only to realize later that it still had a mistake. However, when I pick up writing for one of my coworkers, I can easily identify the mistakes. Having someone who has no emotional connection to the writing helps to eliminate some common mistakes such as having a word spelled correctly, but it not being the right word and sending the wrong essay to a college (think of an essay finishing with, “…and that is why I want to go to your biggest competitor.).
It is important that you have two different types of people edit your essay: those who know you well and those who don’t know you well. Why is that important? You want someone who knows you to read your essay and finish it and think that the essay accurately portrays you. Further, you want someone who doesn’t know you to finish reading the essay and get the feeling that they do know you. This means you need to start your essay early enough to allow time to have people review your essay for you.
In this video James Maroney and Guy Milone discuss what makes a good college admission essay. Guy gives tips on telling the story and some examples of essays he has read in the past that truly resonated with him.
The vaunted college essay or personal statement causes much consternation. However, it isn’t the only writing sample on a college application, and applicants need to remember to put the same amount of care in to all writing samples. On the Common Application (http://www.commapp.org), in addition to the long essay there is a short response (150 words), “Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer, 750 character maximum).” This question used to read, “What is you most meaningful activity and why?” and I recommend you still treat it that way. In many ways, what you choose to write about says almost as much about you as what you actually say. Truly choose the most important activity to you, and not what you think they want you to say. It is important to maintain authenticity in your application. Besides, admissions officers are skilled professionals who are pretty good at sniffing out a phony.
In addition to the short answer, many colleges have supplements with additional essays. A number of colleges have some variation of the question “Why us?” on their supplement. Make sure you take the time to research the school and show appropriate interest. Do not just submit a generic response that you use for all the colleges to which you are applying. Many schools use demonstrated interest in their admission decision, so you may want to mention how the school felt right on a campus visit, if you were actually on campus. You may also want to mention specific programs or clubs you research on the school’s website.
On their supplement, schools might also ask a number of different questions. In fact, it has become more popular for schools to ask a series of short response questions, which almost seem like tweets, as many are limited to less than 200 characters. Wake Forest is one college who asks these questions as a way to better learn about a student’s personality to determine if the student is a fit for their culture. Here are some of their sample questions:
· What outrages you? What are you doing about it?
· This year our Wake Forest Student Union invited expert students to become teachers of non-credit classes in the Wake Forest Experimental college. Provide us with the title of a course that you could teach your peers.
· Make a rational argument for a position you do not personally support. For clarity, please state your true opinion first and then argue the opposite position.
· You may invite any three individuals from history to join you for a cup of coffee at our university coffee house, Campus Grounds. Whom would you invite? What is your icebreaker question to start conversation? and where might the conversation go from there?
· Give us your top ten list.
Just like with the main essay, it is critical to give yourself enough time to respond to the additional writing samples. Brevity is critical, as the character limit is strictly enforced by the online applications. This is a test of getting your point across in a concise manner, which can prove to be difficult. However, if you do take your time to plan out your responses, you should be able to use these short writing samples to your advantage.
In this video topic, James Maroney founder of AdmissionHook.com discusses good admissions essay topics and how to carefully choose your topic in order to write the best college application essay.
How to Write a Good Essay Using Essay Reviews
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So (never use “so”), you think that you write pretty good (well). However, every essay could use a bit of improvement. One of the most biggest mistakes students make is to ignore the opinions of others when writing their essays. You can greatly improve your chances of admission into your first choice college by using essay reviews to improve your college admissions essay (don’t write in the second-person). Here are a few tips (too blunt):
The first step in using essay reviews is to GET THEM! Many students view essay revision as a mere formality. However, unless you’re a bestselling author who does his own copy-editing, you need all of the input that you can get! You should have your parents, teachers, and counselors review your essay, in addition to obtaining a professional opinion .
Once you’ve compiled essay reviews, you should read them and carefully consider each revision, especially suggestions about the structure and content of the piece (you need not pay much attention to grammatical corrections unless they come from your English teacher or professionals ; far too many potential reviewers consider a semi-colon and a comma to be interchangeable). Though you may not wish to incorporate every reviewer’s thoughts, they will spur your imagination as to what your essay could eventually become.
At this point you must take care to use your own voice when making revisions. One of the best ways to do this is by considering every suggested revision, then stashing-away the essay reviews and making corrections to your own work. This method helps to prevent you from accidentally copying the reviewers’ exact phrasing.
The last step in this process is to repeat, repeat, REPEAT! After you’ve revised your essay, obtain more reviews. In fact, our editing service offers price breaks for subsequent essay revisions.
Perhaps the best (and only) way to use essay reviews to write a good essay is to get them and use them. Far too many students make the mistake of self-editing. By obtaining and paying attention to essay reviews, you’ll help to put yourself ahead of the game.
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This article was contributed by Dakota Meyers, who just completed his freshman year at Yale University and is a regular contributor to the CollegeTreasure.comandAdmissionHook.com blogs. He is a 2009 graduate of Hoisington High School in Hoisington, KS. At Hoisington High, he won varsity letters in debate, speech, scholars’ bowl, and band. He won the 2009 3A Kansas State Championship in extemporaneous speech.
At Yale, Dakota intends to major in Economics and Mathematics. He writes for the campus publication Business Sphere and is an active member of the Yale chapter of Nourish International. He also participates in the Yale Political Union as a member of the Independent Party.
As a current college student, Dakota has recent first-hand experience with the college admission process.